Because the focus pen worked on the bench, I was certain this had to be true:

There is a break somewhere along the blue wire carrying 24 V to the focus pen. The signal and 0 V wires are fine.
I updated the original post, because I’m going to use that picture a lot whenever the subject of laser machine wiring comes up.
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This brings back fond(?) memories of college days. The apartment for four of us had one telephone (circa 1973, so that was the limit), so for *those* phone calls, we had a 50′ extension cable for the phone. Not terribly expensive, though compared to our budgets, expensive enough.
When it failed, we had a minor quandry, until the roommate who was headed for RF work mentioned he had access to the college TDR (time domain reflectometer, milspeek Cable Radar). He hooked up the cable, ran his finger along it to change the point impedence, until the spikes coincided. A few minutes with solder and tape, and we had a working cable. Cost, effectively zero, since at least two of us had the tools and supplies.
Ya gotta have tools and a TDR is definitely high class.